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Hero, Meet Heroine

I began my current WIP about three weeks ago. There I was, pleased as punch, just churning out words. I’d plotted and researched for a while before actually putting words to screen. Then, when I was 30k words into the story, I had a revelation: I was writing the story all wrong.

What had seemed like a good idea when I was plotting it out, felt wrong. I didn’t want my hero to be such an ass that readers wouldn’t like him. He still has to be an ass though. It’s part of the lesson he has to learn (you know, how not to be an ass). But the way I was writing the story, he was too hard, the heroine was too soft. Meh.

So I had to think about how to turn it around without straying too far from my planned plot. All I did was change the way the hero and heroine met. That one scene gave the story an entirely different feel and my heroine isn’t a wimp now while my hero is a dangerously sexy ass instead of just an ass. (It’s my word of the day folks, sorry.)

What did I do exactly? Well, here’s a look at what it was and what it is now:

Before
It was inevitable. When you have an outdoor table full of steaming food, some nasty animal was bound to come by and try to snatch it.
With a growl of possessive fury, Talon lunged at the cat trying to steal a piece of fish from one of his many plates.

After
A naked woman answered the door, her lips wet and swollen, eyes heavy with sated desire.
Valeria York took an instinctive step back.
“I hope you’re up for a hard ride,” the woman said in a drowsy voice. “He’s insatiable this afternoon.”

I think the second is much better. In the ‘before’ my idea was for the hero to be so insensitive, he wouldn’t help a starving animal, scaring it instead and causing the heroine to rescue it and immediately label him as an animal abuser. Yeah, I didn’t like that so much. The ‘after’ we see is just a man with too much staying power for one woman…ahem.

What do you think? And what to do you do when you realize your characters’ first meeting isn’t quite right?

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Fantasy Man Friday

I can’t remember a week when I’ve looked forward to Friday as much as this week. Not that it was a terrible week or anything, but it’s the kick off to several weeks without a day off. Holiday season is great, but your mind gets used to those precious holidays from work and when none are forthcoming, it makes the weeks drag on.

For the most part, it was a great week. I got a lot of writing done on the new WIP. My hero is so obnoxious, I’d want to strangle him if I wasn’t half in love with him already. On the other hand, I’m exhausted. The Olympics keep me up later than I’m used to and my dog has taken to waking me up at 4 in the morning, so needless to say I’m not getting enough sleep. I look like the walking dead no matter how much concealer I use under my eyes. Meh.

So it’s Fantasy Man Friday. People, I have been spending hours and hours looking for the perfect men to bring you each week. It isn’t easy and I’ve seen more of some men that I’d ever care to, but it’s a small price to pay for the few men I do find to kick off your weekends.

In honor of my newest hero, Talon “Icarus” Katsaros, I’m going to show you how I see him. No, he doesn’t have wings, but the rest of him makes up for that, I think.

So Talon is a bit of a hedonist. He’s tormenting the hell out of my shy heroine and I’m loving every minute of it. I don’t think she’ll hold out much longer though, because LOOK at him! What am I saying? How can you not look at him? He’s gorgeous, oh my. I think a scene is necessary based on this picture.

Imagine this: she’s cooking for him (cause he hired her to), and he steps in to the kitchen looking like this. She’s been hurt badly in the past by men and doesn’t trust them, and she definitely doesn’t trust Talon. He loves to torment her. So what now? What does she do? What does he do?

I’d be interested to see what you all say and to make it fun, whoever comes up with the most outrageous scenario will win a book. Happy Friday everyone, and have a great weekend.

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